23 Sept 2011

THE HOTHOUSE KID.

You're daddys' big extention.
He'll love you when you're grown.
But knowledge is a dangerous thing
when your mind is not your own.

Run,run,run!Accumulate!
But this he never told you
when forcefed like a foie gras goose
and brainwashed like a soldier.

Pretentious and precocious,
peace of mind is just a dream.
Academic swagger
fills the family cash machine.

A plastic wife and palace,
with no one else above you.
A life of carrot-chasing
and he never said he loved you.

No longer climbing ladders
like you did when you were young,
your bonsaied brain a child again
and daddy got it wrong.
Thank you for The Perfect Poet Award.

19 comments:

  1. I love "bonsaied brain". Brilliant!

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  2. Anonymous19.10.11

    Nicely done my friend, I loved it!

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  3. Anonymous19.10.11

    some divine lines there, well done.

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  4. Aww sad to admire someone so much who never let you know they really loved you.
    A nice piece of prose and, thanks for stopping by my blog and the lovely comment.

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  5. Anonymous19.10.11

    "No longer climbing ladders
    like you did when you were young,
    your bonsaied brain a child again
    and daddy got it wrong."

    - gorgeous, and so sad. You have a wonderful way with words.

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  6. Anonymous19.10.11

    Very good write. Plastic wife, carrot-chasing, very good imagery. Nice.
    William

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  7. beautifully written n awesome expressions :)
    loved it..

    PS: thanks 4 stopping by
    hope to c u more often

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  8. Anonymous19.10.11

    Excellent poem filled with brutal honesty. Keep writing!

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  9. Some lovely alliterative phrases in this. Great poem!

    Here is my entry:
    http://jackedwardspoetry.blogspot.com/2011/10/this-is-my-mug.html

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  10. Hello.
    A most vivid write.
    Sad ending.

    Thanks for sharing.

    Bashful Lady

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  11. This poem is so excellent and so well penned happy poetry picnic
    http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/10/20/taken-from-me-on-halloween-night/

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  12. great tackling,

    lovely emotions.
    Happy Rally.

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  13. Anonymous22.10.11

    "academic swagger" - resoundingingly brilliant!

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  14. Hello.
    Just stopping by to say thanks for following my blog. I always like to return the kindness & am following you too.
    Hope to see you soon!

    Thoughts Of Beauty In The Stillness Of Dawn

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  15. Anonymous24.10.11

    that was absolutely brilliantly expressed !!

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  16. Anonymous24.10.11

    Acceptance link. http://promisingpoetsparkinglot.blogspot.com/

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  17. Congrats for the award. Well deserved.

    Very interesting poem.

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  18. you write superb poetry, keep it up.

    join poets rally week 55 next Wednesday again.

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  19. Great message in this poem. Loved it.

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